A very astute reader of mine who is in Special Forces pointed out to me that, in the original version of Chapter 5, the security protocols surrounding the Central Admin building would have been considered amateurish and inadequate. Bowing to his much greater expertise and realizing the inadequacy myself, I rewrote the scene to include a much beefier entrance.
Chapter 5 of The SubVersion Complex has been edited, but I didn't do it as a new post, just as a change to the original one to avoid confusion. In case you missed the chapter or want to read it with the new edits, click here.
Thanks to Ryan for his suggestions for the chapter! I am always open to critiques and suggestions, so keep 'em coming.
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